the topic is how interent is something big in our daily lifes and how we use interent for everything
1. What do you think of the writer’s first sentence? Does it grab your attention? How does the sentence accomplish grabbing your attention? What might the writer add or subtract to/from the first sentence to make it stronger (if anything)?
2. Identify the writer’s thesis statement. Does it fit in with the rest of the introduction? Does the introduction flow into the thesis statement or is the thesis simply tacked onto the introduction? How can the writer make the thesis statement stronger? Does the thesis tell the reader WHAT THE ESSAY IS ABOUT or does the thesis tell the reader HOW THE WRITER PLANS TO PRESENT THE INFORMATION? For example:
WHAT THE ESSAY IS ABOUT: Dr. Piep taught me a great deal about writing through his calm and concisie commentary.
HOW THE WRITER PLANS TO PRESENT THE INFORMATION: I am going to tell you about Dr. Piep and how he made me a better writer.
3. What strategy (see the “Introductions” handout) is the writer using in the introduction? Is the strategy used throughout the introduction? How can the writer use the strategy more effectively?
4. What do you feel is the strongest sentence in the introduction? Why is it the strongest sentence? What does the sentence do that all of the writer’s sentences need to do?
5. Ask a friend to read your introduction and then tell you what he or she expects the paper will discuss, what kinds of evidence the paper will use, and what the tone of the paper will be. If your friend is able to predict the rest of your paper accurately, you probably have a good introduction.
Thesis
1. Does the writer tell the reader how they will interpret the significance of the subject matter under discussion? Is ‘audience’ at the center of the thesis?
2. Is the thesis a road map for the paper; in other words, it tells the reader what to expect from the rest of the paper? Where do you think the paper is going?
3. Does the thesis statement directly answer the question asked? Is the thesis ‘on topic’?
4. Does the thesis make a claim that others might dispute?
5. How can the writer make their thesis a stronger statement?
