See professor comments below for editing, please.
ME: In the introduction, I mentioned how important it is to understand the link between child trafficking and technology. Would you suggest any specific ways to strengthen the connection between these two in the intro to ensure that the reader comprehends the significance of technological advancements in combating child trafficking, please?
Could you review “Pervasiveness of Child Trafficking” and give feedback on whether the section sufficiently addresses the root causes of child trafficking and if there are any areas where I need to further elaborate to strengthen the argument, please?
Chelsea , Apr 16 at 8:18pm
PROFESSOR: I think you’ve done a good job of linking the two in your introduction. You need to add your research question, in question form, at the end of your introduction to serve as your thesis. This will further solidify exactly what you are looking at within the paper.
The section you asked about does do a good job of addressing some root causes, but I think you need to find a way to connect trafficking and technology in this section. If the two are intricately connected in your paper, it doesn’t make sense to have a main section that does not deal with technology at all. For example, you say “By using the desperation and lack of resources that are common in marginalized communities’ traffickers ruthlessly take advantage of children for profit, and many of them subject them to unimaginable suffering and take away their rights and dignity altogether.” How does technology come into play here? In communities that have a lack of resources in the way you are discussing, WiFi and other technology is not always available. Is this a way that they take advantage, by showing children something that they are not familiar with? If you can make just a couple subtle connections to technology in this section, then it will better lead into your next section about the role of technology, which covers the rest of the needed background information.
