Order Instruction: Requestin the rewriter of “Research Background and Method of Data collection” to reflect the feedback given.
The information below are the feedback received from my supervisor.
“Hi!
I can see you are improving but still it requires focus. See attached some commnets. Consider below:
1. The project is still too broad and requires focus. I have scoped and suggested the titlle and two objectives as per your aspiration. So, you can stick to it.
2. You do not need introduction, project description etc. Just floow this heading: Research Backgroud, Research aims and objectives, Literature review, Methodology, Ethics, Gantt Chart, Conclusion.
3. In background section you should start with the practical issues of climate impact of construction indistry in general. Use some graph / table or statistics to show the reader how construction industry is being polluted and incur more CO2 emission across the construction supply chain. You can find lots of info on this. Another paragraph should discuss the current climate pollution in Jamiaca from construction sector. Then move on to another paragraph to talk about the emergence of Industry 4.0 technologies and its application in the construcition industry to reduce environmental impact. Highlguth some key studies (not in detailks) that focuses on how different I4.0 technologies are being adopted to reduce generic environmental burden (e.g, CO2 emission / climate impact) in the construciton sector. Address it clearly how much is known on your topic (i.e., the benefits and barriers of adopting I4.0 technologies) and what are the lackings of understanidng on your topic. They will be your research gaps. So, outline clearly those research gaps so the reader can be convinced that why you have undertaken this research. For instance, there are very few studies that focus on understanidng on how different I4.0 technologies can be utilised to deal with carbon emission though many ohter studies outline the overall sustainability etc. So be clear and criticise other key works done in this title.
In LR section, outline clearly what has been done / known already on each objective and what are the unknown fcats/info that are important to know. You can create a LR Table to summarize all the releavnt key literature. Then synthecize them critically to adress why we need another study to find out the answer of these two objectives. See attached a related literature and see how they presented the case and LR table.
Use Qualitative study and justify why qualitative, why semi-structured interview, what sampling approach, who will be the participnats and why they will be selected? How would you get access to them? Or how would you recruit them?
In ethics section, customise the generic ethics on your study needs. Think if any special ethical concerns and how would you resolev them etc.
Prepare a project plan / Gantt chart.
This will be a very good project and people will appreciate your work as this is very contemporary and will address the crucial problem of Jamaican ongoing issue of climate chnage as the cpountry is more vulnerable to such climate impact, being within caribbean teritories.
Hope it helps and I hope you should be able to execute the proposal as advised.”
NB: I’ve shared the word doc with my supervisor feedback. Please keep confidential.
YouApr 4, 7:31 AM
Comments received on the first, is as follows (16th March 2024):
“I can see you are improving but still it requires focus. See attached some commnets. Consider below:
1. The project is still too broad and requires focus. I have scoped and suggested the titlle and two objectives as per your aspiration. So, you can stick to it.
2. You do not need introduction, project description etc. Just floow this heading: Research Backgroud, Research aims and objectives, Literature review, Methodology, Ethics, Gantt Chart, Conclusion.
3. In background section you should start with the practical issues of climate impact of construction indistry in general. Use some graph / table or statistics to show the reader how construction industry is being polluted and incur more CO2 emission across the construction supply chain. You can find lots of info on this. Another paragraph should discuss the current climate pollution in Jamiaca from construction sector. Then move on to another paragraph to talk about the emergence of Industry 4.0 technologies and its application in the construcition industry to reduce environmental impact. Highlguth some key studies (not in detailks) that focuses on how different I4.0 technologies are being adopted to reduce generic environmental burden (e.g, CO2 emission / climate impact) in the construciton sector. Address it clearly how much is known on your topic (i.e., the benefits and barriers of adopting I4.0 technologies) and what are the lackings of understanidng on your topic. They will be your research gaps. So, outline clearly those research gaps so the reader can be convinced that why you have undertaken this research. For instance, there are very few studies that focus on understanidng on how different I4.0 technologies can be utilised to deal with carbon emission though many ohter studies outline the overall sustainability etc. So be clear and criticise other key works done in this title.
In LR section, outline clearly what has been done / known already on each objective and what are the unknown fcats/info that are important to know. You can create a LR Table to summarize all the releavnt key literature. Then synthecize them critically to adress why we need another study to find out the answer of these two objectives. See attached a related literature and see how they presented the case and LR table.
Use Qualitative study and justify why qualitative, why semi-structured interview, what sampling approach, who will be the participnats and why they will be selected? How would you get access to them? Or how would you recruit them?
In ethics section, customise the generic ethics on your study needs. Think if any special ethical concerns and how would you resolev them etc.
Prepare a project plan / Gantt chart.
This will be a very good project and people will appreciate your work as this is very contemporary and will address the crucial problem of Jamaican ongoing issue of climate chnage as the cpountry is more vulnerable to such climate impact, being within caribbean teritories.
Hope it helps and I hope you should be able to execute the proposal as advised.”
Second submission comments are as follow:
“Please, remember it is almost 5th time I have provided you with comprehensive feedback. I agree that you are progressing well – but you also keep in mind that you should incorporate all my previous comments. It seems like you have not considered all my comments made on 16th March. Please, see attached as I made some comments on this latest version. You should consider both these comments and other comments on 16th March (both email body and comments annotated on your work). Perhaps, you missed out on the comments annotated on your Word file. For instance, you have not corrected objectives, methods, etc as suggested previously. So, please, consider all comments (given on 16th March and today’s comments). Remember to see the comments annotated on the Word file.
The good point is that you have made good progress on your topic but it requires appropriate focus and communication via appropriate presentation.”
YouApr 4, 7:44 PM
Ideas of Practical issues of climate impact of construction industry in general for Jamaica are:
– The accummulation of debris
– Carbn emmission and
– Dust from demolition and cement
– Mining
– Removal od Trees
– Creation of Waste
– The destruction on the mangroves while constructing or making way for the construction of new bridges thus impacting the ecosystem negatively; Mangrove protects the course, reduce the impact of climate change as it relates to flooding, ensuring the ecosystem is being cleanse and functioning helathy. (For example en route to the Kingston Airport, on that strech, was proned to sever flooding and whenever the roads was contructed it was damaged due to flooding. Which resulted in the some of the mangroves be destroyed and several bolders lining the road, stacked upon each other to provide a barrier for the ocean and reduce flooding impact. However, as you drive further down towards the airport in Kingston, once will notice several parts of mangrove were destroyed and flooding continues to occur..
– Over, the construction process must that place, however, me must take steps to cushion the impact on the environment and remedy the nuisances.
Hope the points above will help in crafting the background based on my supervisor feedback.
