my professor’s Feedback:
Introduction Clarity and Thesis Statement: The introduction introduces the topic well but lacks a clear thesis statement that articulates the main argument or focus of the paper. Consider explicitly stating what the paper will explore regarding the impact of Electronic Health Records (EHR) on patient care quality. Repetitiveness: The phrase “Electronic Health Records” is used repetitively. After the first mention, use the acronym “EHR” consistently to enhance readability.
Body of Paper——– Organization and Headings: The content is generally well-organized, but the paper would benefit from clear headings and subheadings (e.g., Level 1, Level 2 headings) to break up sections and guide the reader. For example, “Benefits of EHR” and “Challenges of EHR” could be used as Level 1 headings, with more specific subheadings under each. Ensure all headings follow APA 7th Edition guidelines, which require headings to be bolded and appropriately capitalized.
In-Text Citations: The in-text citations are generally correct but should adhere strictly to APA guidelines. For instance, citations should include all authors’ last names in the first citation (Wang, Li, Deng, & O’Brien, 2018) and then can be shortened to “Wang et al. (2018)” in subsequent citations. Ensure page numbers are included in citations when direct quotes are used (e.g., Wang et al., 2018, p. 15). Content and Analysis: The discussion of EHR’s benefits and challenges is well articulated. However, ensure that each point is supported by evidence from the literature. For example, if you mention a benefit such as improved patient safety, it would be helpful to include more detailed data or studies to substantiate the claim. Consider balancing the discussion by including more specific examples or case studies that illustrate the impact of EHR on patient care.
Conclusion Summary and Future Directions: The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points but could be strengthened by including suggestions for future research or practical recommendations for healthcare providers regarding EHR implementation. It would be beneficial to reiterate the importance of addressing the challenges associated with EHRs to maximize their potential benefits.
References Reference Formatting: The references are formatted correctly, but double-check that they are in alphabetical order and formatted with a hanging indent. Ensure all journal names are italicized, and that the references follow the appropriate format for articles, including DOI or URL links. For example: Campanella, P., Lovato, E., Marone, C., Fallacara, L., Mancuso, A., Ricciardi, W., & Specchia, M. L. (2016). The impact of electronic health records on healthcare quality: A systematic review and meta-analysis. The European Journal of Public Health, 26(1), 60-64. https://doi.org/10.1093/eurpub/ckv122 APA Compliance Formatting: Ensure the entire document is double-spaced with 1-inch margins on all sides. The font should be Times New Roman, 12-point, or another APA-approved font like Arial. Include page numbers in the top right corner of each page.
