I have my draft done, so I want you to revise the draft. Comments from the professor about the draft will be listed below:
1. Introduction: Your introduction offers a clear idea of your project and your research questions. It also mentions Portugal and Angola as case studies, which does not seem as supported with the literature under review
2. Logical division of sources: You could clarify the titles of your subheadings.
Assessment of each source: You offer good summaries of each article, but they could be more consolidated. The part of evaluation needs to be more specific. Rather than leave it for a paragraph at the bottom, integrate it in to the overall section of reviewing the source.
3. Comparisons: Your section on comparisons establishes some connections, however, it could be more effective to integrate that section into the other sub-sections on the sources. In the comparison section, you started to mention Portugal and Angola, which had not appeared previously
4. Conclusion: In your conclusion, you can more effectively synthesize the research that is under review. For instance, which pieces offer the greatest contribution to the understanding and development of the topic? What oversights still exist? You point toward future directions. Your conclusion speaks in broad strokes and could be more rooted in the specifics. I am also not sure how Portugal and Angola play in the research that you are reviewing.
5. Length and Formatting: The separate section of comparisons could be more effectively integrated into each of your subheadings that introduce the articles. This would result in less repetition and strengthen your analysis
