I have been doing my reserch paper already, I just need an dditional 2 pages added to this. I would like an extra 1.5 page added in the END of the “Literature Review” section. And and extra .5 page to be added at the END of the “Findings” section. PLEASE DO NOT CHANGE ANYTHING THAT I ALREADY HAVE IN THE ESSAY.
Please find an additioal 2 scholarly sources that will help enrich the points made in my paper. Thank you. Please keep in mind to stick with the theme. Please add in the end of my introduction the main thesis which should be: “While in-person classes for full time students hold a better teaching value, it creates more difficulties for full-time working students in the post-covid era, as people’s responsibilties have changed. Such responsibilties may extend from now becoming the main earners in the family to students who live on their own with no one else to financially suppport them. Thus more adequate changes should be made in CUNY colleges to accomadte such needs of students, including accomadations like having the Tutoring and writing center open for a longer period of time.”
This was the feedback that I recieved from the Professor about what I already have thus far:
“Thanks for your continued work on this project! Here are a few things to look at as you complete your final revisions:
– Make sure the introduction includes a statement of your main thesis.
– The lit review is divided up into a lot of subsections. See if you can combine some into broader subsections.
– The findings section could use more quotes from your interviews. You do have some specific stories, but including their own words gives us more of a sense of how they experience it. I WILL ADD IN THE QUOTES FROM MY. INTERVIEWS MYSELF SO WRITER DO NOT WORRY ABOUT PUTTING IN FAKE QUOTES.
– Remove language about “proposed” study–you’ve done it now, not just proposed it! so make chages to make it past tense about what you have lready done.
– Be more specific about policy recommendations and/or future research. The conclusion gets a little vague.
– Fix the formatting/margin in the bibliography.
