CHANGE WHAT THE TEACHER ASKED AND FIX ALL OF IT. USE HIS ADVICE AND REVERT BACK TO ME WITH CHANGES, NO AI NO PLAGARISM.
I think (and hope) you know this is way too much for the introduction paragraph. I think you’ve tried to map out multiple paragraphs here.
Your introduction starts out with unsupported claims that I’m not sure you need to make. I would strongly consider cutting the first several sentences.
You say Spirited Away is acknowledged in a certain way — acknowledged by whom?
What does it mean to successfully render cultural and religious symbolism? What are the symbols? What is success? To whom are these representations made, and how?
What makes Shinto elements organic?
Isn’t it possible that respect for tradition came from someone other than the director? Or that is was just a fluke? My point is that I’m not sure what we gain by making the claim about proof, but if you make the claim, then you’ll need to support it. So make sure you keep focused on your main claim.
You mention a different perspective in Section II, but you don’t say which scholarly source you’re using for support. You need to identify it in your intro in order to engage with both sources throughout the whole paper.
You say that Spirited Away does not impart a complete understanding of the folklore elements that Reider analyzes. That seems not only reasonable, but to be expected. Does Reider say otherwise? Does Reider say it offers a complete understanding? If not, then where’s the disagreement?
You could certainly argue that Reider’s lens is not the only one that matters if you introduce another lens that offers a complementary perspective. That’s a viable alternative approach to the paper that uses much of the work you’ve already done. But I’m concerned that this draft seems to focus heavily on disproving a claim that I’m not sure Reider actually makes. Is “successful depiction” the same as imparting “a full understanding”? I’m not sure that Reider meant it that way, and I’m not sure it’s reasonable to expect any movie to provide a full understanding of a rich cultural tradition. If you think Reider did make that claim, then you need to provide specific evidence from the article to back up your assertion.
