Step 1: Revise Project
Substantially revise the content of your draft using the feedback you have received from your peers, instructor, and mentor (if applicable).
(ALL Feedback: If this is a letter to your mayor, you should make it look more like one: no cover page, and your contact info at the top along with that of your recipient. You also should get rid of the section headings and numbered lists. Early on, I’m seeing some typos and errors in punctuation (you also have a tendency to begin ideas with transitions, which don’t always totally make sense), so you might try using Grammarly to help you catch these. Remember that proper language use helps build your credibility with your audience. You do a good job of establishing the problem in your intro, but I’m not sure I see a clear thesis. Make sure that you end your introduction paragraph with a sentence that briefly explains who is doing what in your best solution and the reasons why it’s the best solution to the problem. (This should then be the focus of your best solution section.) I think you could streamline the first alternative solution. That section is pretty long, especially considering how much more there is to cover. It seemed like you put a lot of focus on the alternatives. Nice job on the best solutions section! This is a small thing, but I think you could integrate your research better, such as mixing summary, paraphrase, and quotation (I only really saw summary, I think). You could also introduce them more by briefly stating who they are/what their expertise is so that your reader knows that this person is a trustworthy source. )
Step 2: Review Project Guidelines
Ensure your draft meets all project requirements.
Step 3: Submit Revised Draft
Attach your project in the file upload box. Congratulations on completing your project!
Step 4: Evaluate Your Revision Process
After you complete your draft, write a 2-3-paragraph revision self-assessment (at the end of your draft), in which you
Discuss the feedback you received from your peers and instructor. What aspects of your project did you decide to revise and why?
Compare this draft to the feedback draft you previously submitted. What major changes will your instructor notice about this new, revised draft?
This assessment will help your instructor understand your revision process and direct their feedback.
Submission Requirements
A 2-3-paragraph self-assessment
A full draft of your project, including:
Title/Subject: Something engaging but also something relevant and on-topic
Genre: A letter or a memo
Audience: A decision-maker in the community who has the finances and/or authority to implement the solution
Introduction: Problem description with a clear thesis
Alternative solutions and drawbacks: 2
Best Solution: Argument for the best solution to the problem, supported with 2-3 reasons and ample evidence throughout
Counter-arguments and rebuttals: 2
Conclusion: A convincing call to action
Sources: A minimum of 6 secondary sources and one primary source
Length: At least 1300 words (not including References)
Style: APA format (only for in-text citations and References; abstract not needed)
Format: Microsoft Word-compatible format or PDF. All written work should be in a 12-pt font. Consult your instructor for additional formatting questions, including APA.
