Revising my research paper based on the professor’s comment: Your first section included some comprehensive information. Some good information on the significance of the problem but you need to support with some additional relevant stats and ensure you cite the year data collected (e.g., 2022). Section 3 on how this relates to nurses was very brief. You need to outline clearly how this topic relates to nurses in NICUs. In the interventions section/paragraph, you provided a comprehensive overview of music therapy, but why did you choose music therapy (what are some other competing alternatives that could have been examined and justification for choosing music therapy). This section is about justifying why you are choosing a specific intervention(s) in relation to your PICO question. You did a good job of writing your thesis as a PICO statement. I would pick either standard of care or no intervention (instead of listing both). Search strategies: You outlined your keywords, Boolean operators, but did not include databases searched. You also included some information about inclusion/exclusion criteria. Excellent use of references as you included more 6 reference for your paper all published within the last 5 years. There are no significant issues with APA 7th edition style. Remember, you only need to cite an author once in a paragraph. Unless you cite another author, then cite the author again. The following APA resources and resources posted in Canvas on APA are available. https://apastyle.apa.org/style-grammar-guidelines/references/examples/journal-article-references https://apastyle.apa.org/style-grammar-guidelines/citations I would carefully review your organization of materials and ensure that, for each section, you have included the relevant content. Your paper is too long, as it is almost 5 pages long, and there are sections with a lot of repetition. I recommend cutting your paper down to 3 pages, as you will need 9 pages for your 6 articles and 4 pages for your discussion and conclusion (total of 16 pages)
Use these 6 articles:
Almadhoob, A., & Ohlsson, A. (2020). Sound reduction management in the neonatal intensive care unit for preterm or very low birth weight infants. The Cochrane database of systematic reviews, 1(1), CD010333. https://doi.org/10.1002/14651858.CD010333.pub3
Bağli, E., Küçükoğlu, S., & Soylu, H. (2023). The Effect of Lullabies and Classical Music on Preterm Neonates’ Cerebral Oxygenation, Vital Signs, and Comfort During Orogastric Tube Feeding: A Randomized Controlled Trial. Biological Research for Nursing, 10998004231202404.
https://doi-org.jpllnet.sfsu.edu/10.1177/10998004231202404
CDC (2023). Preterm Birth.
https://www.cdc.gov/reproductivehealth/maternalinfanthealth/pretermbirth.htm
Kobus, S., Diezel, M., Dewan, M. V., Huening, B., Dathe, A. K., Felderhoff-Mueser, U., & Bruns, N. (2021). Music Therapy Is Effective during Sleep in Preterm Infants. International journal of environmental research and public health, 18(16), 8245. https://doi.org/10.3390/ijerph18168245
Lavanga, A., Smith, J., & Johnson, K. (2020). A perinatal stress calculator for the neonatal intensive care unit: a discreet approach. Physiol. Meas. 41 075012.
https://iopscience.iop.org/article/10.1088/1361-6579/ab9b66
Olsson, E., Ahl, H., Bengtsson, K., Vejayaram, D. N., Norman, E., Bruschettini, M., & Eriksson, M. (2021). The use and reporting of neonatal pain scales: a systematic review of randomized trials. Pain, 162(2), 353–360. https://doi.org/10.1097/j.pain.0000000000002046
Ou, Y., Chen, L., Zhu, X., Zhang, T., Zhou, Y., Zou, L., Gao, Y., Wang, Z., & Zheng, X. (2024). The effect of music on pain management in preterm infants during daily painful procedures: a systematic review and meta-analysis. Frontiers in pediatrics, 12, 1351401.
https://doi.org/10.3389/fped.2024.1351401
Weber, A., & Harrison, T. M. (2019). Reducing toxic stress in the neonatal intensive care unit to improve infant outcomes. Nursing outlook, 67(2), 169–189. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.outlook.2018.11.002
