Hello, my professor provided the following feedback to the paper I wrote. Can you make those edits based off of her feedback :
” Jaylin, thank you for submitting your midterm paper. Great choice of your case study, but another main task of this paper is to find at least one academic article for each of the five topics that are relevant to your case study from any public administration academic journal. You need to use the five articles as references for the analysis of your case study to discover the root of the problem and/or the reasons for success. Although you provided several journal articles in your reference list, it is not clear how you integrate selected articles with the case study and how you draw connections among them. The discussion in your paper now seems to only focus on the case study paper you selected. Please consider revising your paper in this regard and resubmit it before I enter your grade here. It would be helpful to review the instructions for this assignment again and use in-text citations to better indicate where you cited the journal papers you selected or other sources.”
Here is the orginal papers instructions and the grading rubric she used to grade my paper the first time resulting in the 72 score.
The Midterm Paper follows a critical essay reflection format (about 8-10 pages). The essay is structured in a way for students to integrate public administration material and make connections between theory and practice around a selected case study. The essay will include the analysis of a public issue case study from the perspective of five themes using the course topics below.
Topics for the Midterm Paper:
Accountability
The Job of the Government
Organizational Theory and Problems
The Executive Branch
Administrative Reform
Students will analyze a chosen case study under each of the five topics in a critical essay, using each topic as a lens to provide a thorough assessment of the public issue exemplified in the case study. Each topic provides a different analytical dimension for the case study, which highlights where and how a breakdown or breakthrough happened as well as lessons that can be learned from it.
Completion Requirements
Select a case study that covers an example of a relevant and recent public issue related to the course (no more than 10 years old).
For example, instances of fraud, discrimination, or examples of success of government coordination, contracting, etc. Hint: Kettl textbook has many great case studies at the end of each chapter, which may help you choose your own.
Midterm and final papers can use the same or different case studies. Students are encouraged to consult with the instructor on their choice of a public issue case study.
Find at least one academic article for each of the five topics listed above that are relevant to your case study from any public administration academic journal. Use the five articles as references for the analysis of your case study to discover the root of the problem and/or the reasons for success.
The articles should be different from those you’ve been assigned to read (i.e., articles listed in the syllabus). However, students may use syllabus readings, other sources, and your personal experiences, as supplemental material if they are relevant to your public issue case study.
Public administration academic journals may include, but are not limited to: Public Administration Review, The American Review of Public Administration, Administration & Society, Public Performance & Management Review, and Journal of Public Administration Research & Theory. ODU library has a subscription to all of these journals in electronic format.
Paper Structure and Format
Introduction – briefly introduce your public issue, the five topics, and how they are connected.
Main text – provide a reflective analysis of the case study under five different topics (lenses). This critical portion should include the following components:
Clear integration of the selected articles with the public issue and clearly drawn connections among them.
Persuasive evaluation of each topic as it relates to the case study, highlighting the pros and cons of each article that talks about it.
Balanced presentation of solutions/ways to look at the public issue using each article.
Conclusion – provide both a short summary stating what has been done in the essay and conclusions that you have arrived at as a result of your work.
Formatting: 12-point Times New Roman font, double spaced, 1” margins, left-justification, first-line indentation, page numbers, no title page, use subheadings, APA style for citations, spell-checked and proofread for grammar and usage errors. All submissions should be uploaded via Canvas ONLY in Word or PDF formats. The submission file should be named in the following format: FirstNameLastName_Midterm or FirstNameLastName_Final.
Students are encouraged to reach out to the instructor for feedback prior to the submission deadline with questions and/or concerns. I am happy to provide feedback on specific questions/concerns you may have. Expect me to respond within 24-48 hours, therefore do not ask for my feedback a day before the submission is due.
Grading Criteria
Please, follow the Midterm/Final Rubric to understand expectations for the assignment and how they will be evaluated.
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Midterm/Final Rubric
Criteria Ratings Pts
Case study selection
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15 pts
Exceeds expectations
Relevant case study choice: extensive information and reasons are provided beyond what is expected.
13 pts
Meets expectations
Overall relevant case study choice: information and reasons for selection are provided without an in-depth description.
5 pts
Does not meet expectations
Irrelevant case study (e.g., old, too broad, etc.): not detailed enough description, unclear reason for the case study choice.
13 / 15 pts
Five academic articles
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15 pts
Exceeds expectations
More than five academic, peer reviewed articles with additional relevant literature are used.
13 pts
Meets expectations
Five academic, peer reviewed articles are used.
5 pts
Does not meet expectations
Less than five academic, peer reviewed articles are used.
5 / 15 pts
Introduction
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15 pts
Exceeds expectations
Clearly written and well-structured introduction.
13 pts
Meets expectations
Acceptable level of clarity and structure in the introduction.
5 pts
Does not meet expectations
Unclear and unstructured introduction.
12 / 15 pts
Main text
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30 pts
Exceeds expectations
In-depth analysis is conducted, comprehensive arguments are provided and clear linkages are drawn between the case study and the five themes.
25 pts
Meets expectations
Analysis and arguments are presented, but linkages can be further enhanced between the case study and the themes.
15 pts
Does not meet expectations
Limited analysis, confusing arguments, the case study is not well connected to the themes.
20 / 30 pts
Conclusion
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15 pts
Exceeds expectations
Systematic and logical conclusion is provided.
13 pts
Meets expectations
Conclusion provided, which could use additional clarification.
5 pts
Does not meet expectations
No detailed conclusion, only generic information is provided.
12 / 15 pts
Formatting
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10 pts
Exceeds expectations
All sections are present with a logical flow across them, all guidelines are followed, no spelling, grammar, or syntax errors.
8 pts
Meets expectations
All sections are present, but minor spelling, grammar, or syntax errors may be present.
5 pts
Does not meet expectations
Not all sections are present, guidelines are not followed. Multiple spelling, grammar, and syntax errors.
10 / 10 pts
