I failed my essay and only got 46%. My tutor allows me to resubmit by editing it. Please see attached the feedback form and the essay.
Advice and targets for a resubmission:
Engage more deeply with more relevant literature and where possible primary sources rather than secondary ones so that you really understand the topic (e.g. Alexander, Mercer)
Reduce the number of aspects you wish to write about – a narrower focus will offer opportunity to demonstrate greater depth of knowledge and understanding
Aim to offer clear, detailed definitions of the key ideas – this will help to exemplify your own understanding as well as supporting comprehension for the reader
Use your knowledge from reading to accurately and objectively analyse practice – think about the how and the why of what is happening
Substantiate all claims with reference to source material or use more tentative language to suggest or consider and revise Harvard referencing expectations
Ensure that theoretical models are introduced with a contextual summary. (Imagine that your assessor doesn’t know anything!)
Pay close attention to your assignment title, ensure that you refer to it regularly throughout your writing process to ensure you are on course to provide a focused and relevant answer.
