I need help rewriting/Correcting my essay. I attached a copy. My professor’s feedback was:
Your thesis is your first sentence. That would work. But you now need to get it into an introduction paragraph. You then have a paragraph with what seems like a new thesis at the end of it (and what you mark as your thesis in your self review). But your essay follows the first thesis. So, just make sure you have that sentence about you and habits at the end of one into paragraph and then body paragraphs that fill out that thesis about you and procrastination. You’re on the right track. Now dig in to describe and explain so a reader can experience what you experienced. As you move to the final draft: Now is the time to spell out contractions: write “do not” instead of “don’t,” etc. Go back through all the materials on essay writing in the modules up to now (yes, all of them) to double check each part of your essay as you narrow into your final draft.
