Hello. Please help me give some comments on rough drafts of 2 of my classmates’ proposal. Please follow these guidelines provided:
– Do we have a clear sense of a gap? (the gap has been specified in solicited proposals)
– Do we have a sense of a solution that precisely matches the gap?
– How is knowledge ordered?
– What are the physical features of such order?
– Where are moments of assimilation? How do they work?
– Where are moments of synthesis? How do they work?
– What is the role of visual elements?
– What is the relationship between visual elements and text? That is, what is a photograph, illustration, diagram, table ,chart ,map used?
– What objections or skepticism or counters could be offered to the proposal?
Other important requirements:
– Just a reminder that these are only rough drafts.
– Comments can just be in a form of simple essay. However, please comment them separately for person A and person B. Please don’t combine into one essay.
– Please provide a helpful comment but do not judge them too hard. Please be very friendly and respectful. Please also treat them equally and not biased.
– Please don’t just say their works are already perfect and are beyond to comment. Please at least spot something useful for them.
– US writing style.
Details for each person
Person A
This person has both letter of transmittal and business proposal. Please comments on them both, but focus more on the proposal. From what I understand this person tries to do a proposal about training programs.
Person B
This person has only a business proposal in a form of application. This person tries to propose a platform to BIPOC Therapist to increase equality in mental health access for an undeserved demographic.
I have attached both of my classmates’ work. Please see the word files. Thank you very much.
